This is my first attempt at a BE story that dosen't envolve vampires of violance.
Set in a school in britan, thus it being "Year eleven: first term." Instead of "Eleventh Grade, first simester." Or what ever you americans do.
This is basicly a simple short story which if enough people enjoy it I might turn it into a series of storys.
Please leave me some feed back.
Thanks =>
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.10
- BE: 2.80
- Characters: 2.90
- Technical: 3.30
eddie
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
The black text on dark rede background makes it unreadable. Black on white is always the best.
Anon
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Was your spell checker broken?
Anon
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 1
I can tell from reading the intro and the comments that I don't want to read this story (or these storys [sic]), what with all the spelling errors. Proof read, or run the story through a spell checker before publishing it.
Hotstuff
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I enjoyed it. Can't wait for a longer follow-up... =D
Alucard
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Okay I would just like to point out the reson that none of my storys are very long, and I doubt they ever will be. I write poems, I'm not used to writing storys. Apart from that thank you for your comments and I will try to improve on the other storys in the series (If anyone actturly wants me to make the series like I did with the hellsing storys.)
Anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Too short make it longer next time.
Cozzie
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Way too short, Next time make it longer.
If you want to color the font/backround, you should have the text white and the backround black. I just find it to be easier on the eyes that way.
deux_anges
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
Very short so, I don't feel there was enough time to develop the BE nor the characters. The red background with black text also made it very difficult to read. I am interested in the textual content, not the colour or the font. Kudos for using the British term system though. :)
anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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