Jade pushes to see how far she and Susan can take their ‘Secret Fuck’ to amazing results. Then Jade visits Stacy Palmer to make amends for breaking her arms. Finally, we see how Tina is handling the lost of her sister.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.87
- BE: 4.47
- Characters: 4.73
- Technical: 3.13
speedy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I really enjoyed the series so far looking forward to the rest of it if you plan on writing more. Thank you for such wonderful sex stories.
Hiroshi
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
I don't know if you read these, or if you are even alive right now, but this story is truly amazing! Many of the others below me are right, the grammar errors, while obvious, do not take away from readability or enjoyment! I was wondering, since you seem to be inactive at the moment, if you would do me the honor of letting me continue your work? I've already written a Day 11, and most of a Day 12 but I haven't posted them anywhere, wanting your approval first. You can contact me with an answer at jblatnikman@gmail.com
Again, GREAT work on what you've created here.
oblivion
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
i've read this story all the way through and i love it, honestly i can't find anything better than power. please continue this story, or at least write something equally epic.
Chaos-Master
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
What happens next? Will Jade straighten out Tina? What will happen at the upcoming orgy? How does Kasume know so much about the supernatural? Please keep this story going!!!
bb
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Truly a well conceived realm of bodily modification and interaction. I particularly like the variety of alterations and attention to detail. This entire series has me wanting more yet I keep looking for an update that looks like it my never come(no pun intended).
4-b's
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
Please. We need some continuation.
Everything
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Just read through all 10 parts. Wow. Where has this story been all my life? Great fun read and had everything I like about this sort of fiction. Great scenes, awesome use of ridiculous sizes (a personal favourite) and an interesting plot/character development.
Well done, sir.
dan277
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
great story are you going to post a part 11 to power day
Zhs2
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
You. Yes, you. I have a bone to pick with you, mister. I absolutely love your writing (this story included,) and yet you're so hard to find! The grammar is a little shoddy, but your ideas are just my type! This story is especially cute, BTW. I cannot express in words how much it would mean to me if I could somehow get ahold of you and continue on in your great legacy (aka write more chapters, since you don't seem to be doing it yourself!) Please drop me a line @ sitkoffe@gmail.com?
Sex Pony
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
Another fun chapter. I really want to see what happens with Stacy & Tina.
Keep writing.
Very Free
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
Only "a few grammar errors"??? I counted well over a hundred and I'm sure I didn't caught (sic) them all. As I just demonstrated, many of the errors were the wrong tense. Like "finished getting dress" was a common one. Overall I thought the story was quite interesting but it got bizarre at the end (not that that's bad, tho). Being that it's a long time between reading this and earlier chapters, it's difficult to remember back, that Jade is really James, and other things like what powers she and her friends have, etc. This wouldn't be a problem if I'd read the whole thing over a few days. Keep up the good work, and proof-read the draft to caught (sic) those errors.
Demonking
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
I do not see what's the big deal about a few errors. they do not take away from my enjoyment of the story, and I believe that's what counts keep up the great work.
Straywolf
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
Everyone already commented on the grammer. The story is great. I love the character development and descrition. I also like that you kept a consistent mythological system throughout. I look forward to the next installment.
Very Free
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 2
Only "a few grammar errors"??? I counted well over a hundred and I'm sure I didn't caught (sic) them all. As I just demonstrated, many of the errors were the wrong tense. Like "finished getting dress" was a common one. Overall I thought the story was quite interesting but it got bizarre at the end (not that that's bad, tho). Being that it's a long time between reading this and earlier chapters, it's difficult to remember back, that Jade is really James, and other things like what powers she and her friends have, etc. This wouldn't be a problem if I'd read the whole thing over a few days. Keep up the good work, and proof-read the draft to caught (sic) those errors.
Anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great story. A few grammar errors though. Keep up the good work
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