The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Hellsing Part Two
Here it is, part 2.
I have listened to the comments posted on my original version of part one and have tried to make the breast expansion itself longer while still trying to make it seem like it is in the hellsing universe.

I hope you all enjoy the story and any comments are welcomed as long as they are ethier praise of ideas to help me improve the story.

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Deem to dream
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Good story! Also, if you don't mind, do you have an e-mail address I could contact you on? Thank you.

Il Ruinante
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Great Job. Same with the first. This story got me interested because Hellsing is my favorite series. The only problem is that it is written "Jan" and pronounced "Yan". Still, excellent work and I look forward to more!

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I like how you've worked this from the anime, I htink it's a good premise too.

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