What does a bored Chaos God do in today's world? Well, if you're Chance you kidnap people and perform experiments on them. This is the story of Charlotte, a young woman he just happens to run into at the park. What does fate have in store for young Charlotte? You know you want to know. Be nice to your Mistress. She loves feedback. Want to know what happens next in Chance's world? Let me know at MistressA @ live .com (without the spaces).
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.33
- BE: 4.00
- Characters: 4.60
- Technical: 4.40
Sucker4Boobs
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
The pacing felt rushed, but it was a great story. The birthing at the end was wonderful.
Shaving Products
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
I was looking for the report in Yandex and suddenly came across this page. I found a little information on my topic of my report. I would like more, and thanks for that..!
Wayne Boich
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
zOEfx7 Thanks a lot! An extremely interesting comment!!...
Huwawa
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
I loved this story! Please write more.
Woop!i!
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Genoharden
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
A very good start. Different from the usual herd of BE stories I read, and this has a lot of potential. Please don't orphan!!
Kanodin
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Just two things: (1) I am trying to get the connection of the numbers to their symbolic meanings, and what the numbers were that Chance rolled behind Charlotte. For some reason that seems particularly important; (2) The story is a short tease! Obviously these aspects can be fleshed out in later episodes, but I prefer longer installments. Good solid work overall, especially with the hair growth.
EtherealVision
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Can't wait to see more, this has tons of promise
Very Free
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent. I would've given all 5s but for my BE hunger, which wasn't fully satiated. I'm hoping that there really _will_ be more episodes.
BEman
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Excellent story. I'll be keeping my eye out for more.
Quadhouse
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
You can't stop there! More would definitely be appreciated.
inflation_juggalo
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
great story cant wait to find out what hapens next
sdp27
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I too loved the story. I rather enjoyed the natural flow of the reading. The chaos Gods name was great IMHO. Also the prospect of sequals has me wanting more! Great job!
venusbunny
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I greatly enjoyed the chaos god's game. I'd like to see more with him.
Ninja In The Night
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Personally, I rather liked this story, although she adjusted rather quickly to the mindset in my opinion, but I guess raw pure pleasure could do that to a girl. As far as the dice roll went, that was rather intriguing, but a tad sad she didn't get the same number twice, especially wondering what BE rolls would of been... Anyways, great writing & I cannot wait to see more, Happy New Years Mistress.
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