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The Overflowing Bra

Nudas Veritas Chapter 7-9
James learns from his twin sister they both have a rare genetic oddity which can enhance youth and sexuality.  Feeling trapped from the confines of the Newcastle Center for BioTech Research, he tries to escape, only to end up in a pleasurable sexual growth experiment.
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Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 1

Good concept, poor execution.
The story is very disjointed. There seem to be parts missing. That's in addition to the stilted, awkward grammar and word choice throughout.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Liked the characters but overall it somehow falls short in the overall enjoyment score. The balance between story development and BE fun wasn't quite achieved, not enough of the latter.

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Glad to see this story being continued. You have a few missplaced ""
I like how realistic your characters appear.

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