The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Merkava IV
Andy and Amanda III.1
Okay, as promised, the full five chapters of this section. Had to go on a deployment to Afghanistan to get some of it done (no distractions) but here it is, and the next three chapters are already complete, so less waiting (I hope).

Story line continues. The Vatican has a Hit woman, Evil Mind Controling undead wenche finds a new Beau, and Andy and Amanda try to get measured... Did I mention the British are coming?
Average Scores:

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Your writing stinks like cow vomit in an old shoe covered in garlic mixed with a decaying skunk

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

It was a first long story who I read whole. You're fucking good writer.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Nice story, kudos for writing so well from Afghansitan

Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

I was wondering if I'd ever see more of this. I hope it keeps coming.

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