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The Overflowing Bra

The Light Fantastic
Hoferatu, Part 3
Jo discovers Mia's true nature... and what pleasure a magically enhanced slut can bring someone. Mia learns more about what it means to be what she is, and even more about her amazing abilities as a very special Slutpire.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Love this shit!
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Once again a well written story, not overpowered as far as the transformations go, a very well written sex scene, and just the right length to set up a clear fantasy to indulge in. I particularly enjoyed how you handled the psychological changes and reactions of the characters. Mia's seemingly seamless transformation, her moments of doubt, and just what is being done to Jo.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Very good story. I can't wait to see what you come out with next.

Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Good story, can't wait for next part

Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4


Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Fantastic, please continue this series!

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Despite what the scores might seem, I actually liked this a fair bit. A definate improvement (for me, at least) compared to the last two. BE was, sadly, somewhat lacking, but I don't think that seriously hurt the story. Technical quality was fine (that sort of thing often grates on me, so I'm happy to see more writers who actually pay attention to it), although the paragraph formatting seemed a little odd. Possibly just the browser I use?

In any case, very nicely done. Where the first two faltered slightly, this one has quickly regained my intrest and I'm looking forward to #4.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

hotttttttt! mia should be able to alter more qualties about herself like age, complexion, maybe even sex :D

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