The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

From the semi-warped mind of SkeetSkeet: Candice suddenly finds herself held hostage in a plot to extort $250,000 from a lawyer. As the kidnappers grow impatient, so grows poor Candice. Enjoy!
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Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Excellent work- glad to see you back with stories. Really love this line of writing.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Well written. Good grammer. Nice plot. Great twist ending. Can't wait to read more.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

I've always enjoyed your stories very much and have read each of them. I also like that the premise and twists are (or atleast feel) original. As i said in the SAW BE review, I'm a Ass Growth kinda guy so, and you did a great job in SAWII, so bring it on again lol (but i would never deduct points because of that).

I thought the characters were fairly well defined, but, despite the ending I still wish she had enjoyed her growth more towards the end.

Definetly keep up the good work man

Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

Great writing, good story, and BE, not bad for a short story.

Very Free
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 1, Technical= 4

Short atory, entertaining, but the word at the end best describes it: implausible. It might be a bit longer, with more SEX, SEX, SEX. But no more bondage (eew, duct tape). Is this what HELOCs are for? :-> BTW, it's discreet, not discrete.

Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 5

You're a good only comment is that no one in this story seemed to be enjoying themselves very much.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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