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The Overflowing Bra

Fleeting Sanity
Play Thing: Part 1
Linda is board with her boyfriend and hers sex lives she seeks out a solution on the net and finds exactly what she needs.
Average Scores:

Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

terrible,poor english,descriptions,etc..

Hell is full
Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

It was a good story but I agree with the others, improve spelling

Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

It was a good endeavor. Spelling and grammar were a major distraction.

Fleeting sanity
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 1

Ok so upon re-reading my comments I’ve come to realize that I might be mentally delayed. Both of my comments on both stories have some sort of mistake with them, man I must have been drunk or something because normally I’m not that idiotic when it comes to typing two posts.

Fleeting sanity
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 1

So it's nice to see outside my awful grammar so people liked my story I’ll look into getting some one to edit it for me since me a grammar went good buddies back in high school and I haven't gotten any closer to him and then I’ll re post them.

P.S I can’t really regard anyone who at the very least doesn’t but a name down with their criticisms so I have interest in nameless nobodies.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 1

Hey I really liked the story and I eagerly await the next part. The story idea is awesome and I don't mind the poor grammar when the story is this good.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

I agree with whomajigi, the grammar was disapointing. But I thought everything else was good. I hope the next one comes out soon! P.S. when someone different starts speaking, start a new paragraph.

Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 1

Your story had a lot of potential, but was DESTROYED by poor grammar. Spell check can help you out, but if you type something in place of the correct word (Ex: sue/sure), it won't catch that. It's hard to enjoy a story when you are busy trying to figure out what the full sentence should say. They don't charge to post stories by the punctuation mark. Adding a period is a good thing. The same goes for line breaks.

I liked how you even admitted in your own story that you were overusing a phrase too much, rather than thinking of alternate ways to express shock.

By the way, if English is not your first language (which is a very strong possibility), disregard all of this.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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