The Overflowing Bra

terrible,poor english,descriptions,etc..

It was a good story but I agree with the others, improve spelling

It was a good endeavor.  Spelling and grammar were a major distraction.

Ok so upon re-reading my comments I’ve come to realize that I might be mentally delayed. Both of my comments on both stories have some sort of mistake with them, man I must have been drunk or something because normally I’m not that idiotic when it comes to typing two posts. 

So it's nice to see outside my awful grammar so people liked my story I’ll look into getting some one to edit it for me since me a grammar went good buddies back in high school and I haven't gotten any closer to him and then I’ll re post them. 
P.S I can’t really regard anyone who at the very least doesn’t but a name down with their criticisms so I have interest in nameless nobodies. 

Hey I really liked the story and I eagerly await the next part. The story idea is awesome and I don't mind the poor grammar when the story is this good. 

I agree with whomajigi, the grammar was disapointing. But I thought everything else was good. I hope the next one comes out soon! P.S. when someone different starts speaking, start a new paragraph.

Your story had a lot of potential, but was DESTROYED by poor grammar. Spell check can help you out, but if you type something in place of the correct word (Ex: sue/sure), it won't catch that. It's hard to enjoy a story when you are busy trying to figure out what the full sentence should say. They don't charge to post stories by the punctuation mark. Adding a period is a good thing. The same goes for line breaks.
I liked how you even admitted in your own story that you were overusing a phrase too much, rather than thinking of alternate ways to express shock.
By the way, if English is not your first language (which is a very strong possibility), disregard all of this.