This is part two to the series of short stories featuring our favorite sidewalk cavalier and an intrepid conquest of his, Jessica... an incredibly endowed barita at his favorite coffeehouse. This episode highlights his first look at her, and her first interaction with him. Narrated on first-person, I hope you enjoy this steamy little prelude to an insatiable wanderlust for both, if she can look past her commitments.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.50
- BE: 2.00
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 4.00
Clownboat
Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
This is shaping up to be a good story, although there really isnt anything to it at the moment. One issue I have with the story is the overuse of ten dollar words. In a few cases they are misspelled (discababulation?) or used incorrectly. Big words don't make an average story great or "high class." They just make the story hard to read.
puzzler
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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