crash99@online.ie
Long break, but I'm back. I've toned down the strangeness, but raised the quality. The story presents the case of Bob, and the results of several really stupid moves on his part. But, surely a college kid with a magic wishing amulet is no trouble, right? Read on to find out how it all works out for Bob in the end, sort of.
Format: PDF
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.80
- BE: 3.20
- Characters: 3.27
- Technical: 3.67
BE Freak
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great Story, I'd love to see more like it
Pillager
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Funny Stuff!! This is the most original BE story I've ever run across. Three cheers for total originality & unpredictibility!
Benji Dude
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
A very nice and (somewhat) funny story, the BE was perhaps a little weak in it's description, although the sizes reached were great. The one image included was nice but after seeing it I was expecting to see at least one more. I would very much like to read more in this "universe", please do more.
Your Face
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I really enjoyed this one.
DarkHeart
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Much better quality of writing and like everyone else I liked the little twists and turns. Please write more like this.
Squishy
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I suggest you do a whole series of these. Indeed. I do.
Kanodin
Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
One problem for some readers (at least for me), is the way that some characters treat others whenever others have an unfortunate turn of events. I could hardly call Bob's final outcome as something that "works out," so the story needs additional elaboration about why Bob's life as he knows it is not over (think about how much life changes similar to Bob's situation would actually affect your life). The story satisfies the bare requirements of a "story" and the BE descriptions are fine, but it is very hard to appreciate any of it when all the characters are either victims or morally selfish. The structure of the "magic manual" is fine for inserting a story within a story, and you can exploit this by writing additional installments, but that will not magically create protagonists outside a story where there are none. Readers like to see a meaningful and significant struggle between opposing forces, but Bob can hardly do this after he makes his 'mistake.'
MrNuclear
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
cmdr_mark
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Characters feel a bit flat, but engaging all the same. I love the turn of events throughout. In fact, I'd love to see more of this, perhaps in a series.
Ledrian
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
I, like others, enjoyed the original format of the story. The story itself was engaging and entertaining. The BE could have been more descriptive but overall the story was good. I'd love to see additional installments.
wargod
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Not worth reading unless it is a continuation of Dodson's dream series. I await the rest of the series, even though some didn't like it.
Diego
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Nice, I truely enjoyed that.
(But that picture will haunt my nightmares.)
TD
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Dodson dream series are much better (I hope you write a new series of them) ;)
But it's good to see you back.
this fucking sucked.
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
Why on earth did this need to be in pdf format?
VeryFree
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
I was confused and had a hard time transitioning from the "I wish I was in her pants" to him actually being her pussy.
It seems to me that putting the story as an exerpt in a manual is an apology for leaving the reader not knowing what Bob's final outcome was.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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