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The Overflowing Bra

Her Mother's Daughter Part II-The Swiss Chocolate
Average Scores:

Overall= 1, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

You're better off doing original work.

Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Fairly short. A good setup. Interested to see where you go with it. The single scene of enlargement was pretty neat - I also like how the lead character has a means of dealing with enlarging too far. However, the characters are fairly flat and not much is done with them. Obviously I hope you had permission to continue the previous story. If not, shame on you.

Elvis Interuptis
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

ten thousand calories would only add about 2 or 3 cups.

The fact that I noticed that shows that I wasn't really in the story.


Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

Not badly written, but it did seem fairly flat and the story seemed to end abruptly when it could have gotten going.

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