skyice_snowstorm@hotmail.com
The second half of my first story, not as long as the first half, if you would like to see anouther installment please e-mail me and let me know
Average Scores:
- Overall: 1.00
- BE: 1.00
- Characters: 1.00
- Technical: 1.00
Eggman
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
I couldn't get past the first two paragraphs (if that's what you'd call them) in either this story or this first part. For the love of god, learn how to use periods! The premise has potential, but I doubt anyone will get past the fact that each paragraph is a huge run-on sentence with commas where periods should be. Read a book on proper punctuation, fix this mess, and resubmit it, and then maybe you'll get a review from someone who can actually read through it.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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