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Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 3.00
- Technical: 3.00
Instant Gee Eff
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Overall, this guy is better in bed than writing. And by bed I mean penning poetry. Fin
nobody
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
What a weird story. On the one hand it tries to be a story with a lot of character development, yet the characters act downright strange with no real explanation for why they act as they do. Punctuation, particularly in dialogue, is sporadic. This story could definitely use a second pass - it shows potential, as the premise and the goofiness at the end is quite entertaining, and the character setup is good, but after setting it up, it turns out the whole story is just an excuse to run around doing things basically randomly? The end revelation doesn't actually reveal anything either.
Don't want to end on a negative note - the story's got a good sense of place through the use of slang.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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