Tom and Alison go to a nightclub where their fantasies are fulfilled. Some wierd content. Somewhat unfinished. If anyone wants to add to it, feel free. First story, comments/suggestions appreciated.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.87
- BE: 3.67
- Characters: 3.93
- Technical: 3.93
DirtyManwWhore69
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
Why Ate Urp
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Spin
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Nasty and weird - just the way I like it... more please!
DarkHeart
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Damn, that was hot, would have given higher marks for overall enjoyment if you'd finished the story. Can't wait to see the rest. :)
elvis interuptus
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Pretty good set up. NOW write the story.
I can't wait.
Nick
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
The characters seem awfuly trusting of each other and the club very quickly but other than that I liked a lot. Finish more please!
Professor Grow
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
This is a great start to the story. I look forward to seeing where it goes!
Hell-Scythe
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Excellent story. Keep writing. I would love to see where you take it.
___
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Kyu
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Writing was very good, characters were fine. BE mostly offscreen, so knocked a couple points for that. Enjoyment only a 3 simply because this isn't entirely my taste. Nevertheless, excellent first offer - lots of obvious ability.
GoggleBoy
Overall= 3, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I do like where this is going, but seeing as it ended before anything really started I was disappointed...so write the next one!
grey
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
cmdr_mark
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I'd have liked to see more of the story.
Benji Dude
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Finishes in the worst place but is a great start with lots of potential for a universe like master:PC or the MAU universe. Very well written, I was stuck to my seat the whole time (not like that) can't wait for the next part.
nick_caesar
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Great story - please give us a finished one next time!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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