A philanthropist meets the woman of his dreams...
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That was simply the best BE story that I have ever read! Well written, for a change, which is rare around here, and with a great twist.
Really liked this story! The stock character of the old Chinese shop owner, the gentleman, and the damsel in distress. Not to mention FOUR LACTATING BREASTS! I also thought that the time travel bit was a good twist. Keep it up!
creative story, with well develped character(s) and many insighful details - I enjoyed very much reading it! But after the detailed second part, I would have liked to see a better conclusion to the story - we're essentially still caught in a cycle at the end.
Very well put together story. It read, to me, like a screenplay, which may be what the author was going for with the exact repetition in the second half. It didn't bother me a bit. There were a few tiny typos in the story, but not nearly enough to distract me from the story itself. Great work! And as for the whole .doc debacle... there's a good alternative for all you *nix guys out there - openoffice.org - i use it in lieu of MS office on my windoze pcs, and it's also (originally) for unix variants. check it out.
Well, I personally don't see what the problem is about it being a .doc file, and the readme is obviously for warnings, disclamiers, contact info, etc. And I see no fault in that. Anyway, I think the BE decriptions could have been just a little better, but they were still good. The characters were easy to get to know and understand. I also admired some of the other descriptions, and the grammer was nearly perfect. Overall, I thought that despite the fact it was a little long-winded at some points, it was a well-thought out and enjoyable storyline.
Very interesting story, well written though I could have lived without the second half being almost exactly the same as the first. I can understand what you were trying to convey, but it could have been a little less long winded.
Although I'm not a TG fan, this is one of the most enjoyable stories I've read in a while.
hey man, your writing style is pretty cool and humorous. you seem to be quite talented in this. I hope you go on wrting stories. I had to laugh quite often but it didnt kill the erotic feelings. besides you seem to know women quite good eh? ;)
This archive needs mors stories like this!
Great story, the best I've read in a long time. Your material was great in all area, and more than outweighed the minor grammatical mistakes. Keep up the good work!!
A great story, perhaps a little long winded, a bit more varity in wording in the second half would have been nice. Overall though it was a great story, decent characters, good discriptions, just lacking in the BE desciptions. More please.
I think the second half could've been reduced by half - most of it, we'd already read.
If other .doc stories were this competent, I doubt most people would complain about them quite so much. However, .doc files look funny in vim (no, I don't have MS Word on this computer, nor will I ever.)
Personally, I don't see what the big deal about using the ring after midnight was... seems like a win-win to me.