crash99@online.ie
This is a short little work about a girl, a bordello and a bit of bad luck, or could it be good luck? Read and decide for yourself.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.33
- BE: 2.67
- Characters: 3.33
- Technical: 3.00
DarkHeart
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Aside from a few spelling errors, this was pretty good, not a substantial story, but it was enjoyable. May have wanted to put in a few more details about why she came to like what she did, your typical woman doesn't pick up that kind of behavior that quickly.
Keep it up though, and hope you do another installment to the Dodson's Dream series.
IronHammer
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Mediocre, but definitely not -bad-.
Benji Dude
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
A pretty average story. You need to proof read your work but I can see good things coming from this author.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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