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The Overflowing Bra

Dodsons Dream : New Recruits
Sorry its been so long, but the show must go on. This episode delves deeper into the history of Dodson and introduces some unforgetable characters.
Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Much better than your previous stories, this one was fairly interesting, but still need work on your breast growth details.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Much beter. Until now I've enjoyed the spin off more then the original but you are starting to catchup.

The story seems to be finding its way.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

I have been waiting to see where you were going to take the story next. I really like this chapter. I am a little curious about the line "could do magic with licking pussy". It would be nice if you could go into this topic some more next chapter. All and all, a great chapter.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Keep writing! It gets better every time.

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