Next chapter in this spinoff series. You get to see what Cindy has been up to. I introduce Jamie, Katy, Jean and Lois along with a few more characters. And Nancy gets her revenge.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.50
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 4.00
- Technical: 3.00
basil_jelly
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
Story is comming along nicely still a few mispellings and I still like the stretching.
Benji Dude
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Getting better with every story. I got lost with who was saying what a couple of times but on the whole it's getting there. Might want to get someone to proof read your work, get those last few spelling mistakes.
Personally I don't like the present tense format, for me the past tense works best for these kinds of stories I think. One last niggles is that Nancy asks Nick what he changes to someone and Nick say's that he'll "tell her later� and Nancy just goes with it. Imho Nancy would only ask if she curious about what happened and would push a little harder for an answer but that's just me, something to think about.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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