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The Overflowing Bra

Dodsons Dream: Victor 2
The 2nd story in the spinoff serie that OddWerid started.  Another test is performed.  You get to see some action in the mutant slum at the Tentacle Tavern.

Side note: For all of you who note that I'm not a good technical writer, just be glad my wife spellchecks this stuff.  Otherwise, every 15th word will be a puzzle to try and figure out what I'm trying to say.  Oh and thanks for the rating, I like the feedback.
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Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

Another fun romp, however I'd suggest working on your BE description and seeing about having someone with a decent working knowledge of english to edit your stories.

But keep it up! I want to read more. :)

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 2


Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

its a great story but personally i don't like gigants ... - i would like to read more about people in the mutand slums and whats happening there

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