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Iris' Curse: Chapter 1
This is the first chapter of a new series about a young woman cursed to travel the world, transforming people by proxie of an ancient evil fertility goddess.
Average Scores:

Luis
Overall= 2, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 2

Nice review Fun!I agree with all of you that the prtcoduion was really bad and cheap. I especially HATED the dinner segment with the male artists. They forgot it was about the girls, the male artists only wanted to have attention. So disgusting! It was all about them which sucks.And the interviews was boring as hell, especially the top 6 interviews. STUPID.However, I liked the opening (until the start to ask the girls questions.. that was so stupid!). And I also liked the swimwear segment. They were the best.All in all, I was almost crying while watching the show.I dont know why ppl think the evening gowns were nice. I think they looked so bad! Especially with the flowers... ugh..#1: looked so much better but still lacks confidence. Liked the hair!#2: Even tho I dont like her I think she did quite well. But winners material?? Dont think so.#3: Poor Amy, that hair! But she did well!#4: I liked Tracy. Top 3 is well deserved imo. Dont like her big smile, but she ca practice it.#5: Is this Cookies???#6: My favorite girl was way too nervous. But she was still the prettiest of them all. Wanted to see her in Miss International!#7: She was one of my favs but photogenic!?! NO WAY! -_-"#8: She was strong even tho she looked a bit tired. Should be placed top 3.#9: I liked her in the finals! To bad she was paired with Edwin Siu because he kept talking and talking..#10: Very avarage. Shouldnt made top 6 to begin with.

Caipilover
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I like it weird and twisted and Randomking is my favourite author of that kind :-)

BEman
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

This was a very strange one but in a good way. Hoping to see the next chapter soon.

rudeypunk
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Deliciously perverse. Almost Lovecraftian. I wanted to read just to discover what sort of wierdness you could come up with.

DD_Redshoes
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

I am Impressed
Not bad at all and very enjoyable.
I only wished that the pace of the story was a little slower so that the story line could be fleshed out a bit more with some more creative descriptions.
Keep it up and have fun with the characters.
Am waiting with anticipation for the next installment.

DD_Redshoes

none
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Nice beginning when comes the next part

Tang
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Great start. I can't wait for the next chapter too see what other transformations you can come up with.

mrletters
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Just plain too strange. Incoherent.

areader
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Weird and very creative. I liked it. I'm looking forward to more and am interested in how she'll find out the details of the curse.

MrNuclear
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Your old work Sex Game is a classic to me, look forward to getting more stories from you :-D

DarkHeart
Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Very well written, the transformations were sick and twisted. Which is why I liked them. ;)

Could've used a bit better BE description though.

Da Viewer
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Good but I have seen better from Randomking. Waiting to see the next chapter.

cmdr_mark
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

I liked it, but I think I'll reserve judgement until the other parts come out.

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