crash99@online.ie
My second story in the series. The transformations continue, becoming even weirder. The CMF tests out a weapon that could ensure victory for they side.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.13
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 3.50
- Technical: 3.75
areader
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
These twisted transformations are great. I like your descriptions and your creativity. Keep it up!
randomking
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I really liked it. Your writing improved since the first one. Personally, though, I could deal with less penises on women.
DarkHeart
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
Your writing has improved a great deal since the last segment, however I still think your descriptions are lacking. And to top it all off, it feels like I'm reading a really bad rip-off of Marvel's X comic books.
Ratboy
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Lots of intersting weird transformations, paerhaps more half or full body transformations into breasts or penises etc etc. Keep up the good work
X ite
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Hell-scythe
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Keep the strangeness coming.
Macros
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Definitely a great start.. Love the transformations -- only thing I'd look for is that you make them longer :).
Nack
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
A lot of imagination. I really like how the characters change their views about their transformations after they have them. You seem to have a bit of depth in the characters as well, I'd like to see more of that. I do agree though that the stories could be longer. I'd also like to see longer, more detailed descriptions of the characters during their transformations. You're doing pretty good already, but you can still play that up a bit. Good work overall though.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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