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The Overflowing Bra

XXXecil's 'The Sperm'
"It will present hundreds of fantasy women, an army of sluts looking like each guy's walking wet dream! With enough of them, they'll have two or three for each guy! By the time anyone notices the truth, Tyra Banks will be sucking his cock already! And it'll be too late!"
Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Excellent descriptions of the characters, admit ably the point of view does jump a bit, but the jumps are well noted.

Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

The story was well written, and interesting, my only complaint is that the viewpoint jumped around a bit too much at first. But it was a definite pleasure to have a story written in English and in a manner that was relatively easy to understand aside from my aforementioned issue.

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Heh. Obviously inspired by that old horror movie "The Blob". My only complaint was that there was minimal BE.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Its always a pleasure to read XXXecil's works. Since he's one of the few to write 'preg' stories I particularly look forward to reading his stories.

Grey Deth
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

I like it but wish it was more detailed in the process and had better character development. I know with a short story that is difficult to do. I did like how the ending was open ended so that more can be written. It would be nice to be more descriptive with all the people and their 'adventures'. Thanks for writing!

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

A decent effort from an established and gifted writer. The perspective does seem to jump around, causing a little confusion. I got a big laugh out of Blob scene that was lifted from the movie.

benji dude
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

A little confusing at the start but turns into a pretty decent story, I think the perspective jumps a little randomly but other wise a good story.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Excellent descriptions and vocabulary but as mentioned already, a bit difficult to follow the many different characters and not much BE or preg.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

A long listing of celebrity names isn't enough that I can enjoy a story.

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