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Guess what! I'm tired of waiting! I'm gonna post my story! For any who have been pateintly waiting... please enjoy. If anyone cares about my tragic reason please visit the Plume.
This story is about two sisters having thier way with Sam, an old outdated Network Admin... Its got a little of everything- plus its ILLUSTRATED!
PS I hope the story/pic presentation works.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.85
- BE: 3.77
- Characters: 3.62
- Technical: 4.08
billoon29
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
Gaffenheimer
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
It was a good story, although the BE seemed a bit ephemeral.
BE-Lover
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
great BE and GREAT FA story!
HR
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
For the most part, it was well written. Sweet was constantly spelled as sweat. The domain storyline kind of cropped up and lacked better description. The sex scenes were pretty good.
Grayface
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
What can I say you are the man! thank you thank you thank you!
Clovis
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Overall, a fine story. The writing quality was particularly good with some wonderful lines (especially the twin sunrises.) The male character was believable- the females fun but lacking any individual traits to set them apart. I would have liked longer growth descriptions/ reactions and more growth specific writing overall. A good story, but not up to your best work which I consider to be "Thinking of You." Your continued attempts at topping it are much appreciated though.
MrHHH
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
I'm not going to enjoy writing this review, because Blake is one of the few excellent authors of the BE community. Compared to "Prisoner of his own accord" and "Thinking of you", it's hard to believe that this was written by the same guy!
Sam made an interesting character, but the two girls were easily forgettable. I actually like FA, but when the girls expand, they seem to fill with air. I guess that's a personal thing, but breasts and women that are filled with air are just balloons.
The variety of change in the women was nice, the scenery and the mood you set up felt rock solid real. A few technical mistakes forced me to rate this as a 4.
Thinking back, your best stories were written by a woman's point of view. I hope your next tale will have that.
EZ
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
benji dude
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
A pretty good story with a few (unfortunate) mistakes.
Joe Monday
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Great Story! Great sense of fun by the girls. I like the inflation scenes, and types.
BateMan
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Solid story. Development was good with a nice pace. I enjoyed it.
rudeypunk
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Okay story but the women were far too homogeneous. The visuals on the other hand added an extra dimension. Keep going in this direction.
rtpoe
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
A few typos, but I wish I was Sam.
rtpoe
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