DoobiesnaxBE@AOL.com
The first two chapters of a BE horror series.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 4.50
- Technical: 4.00
Dinner
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 3
I've been looking into writing a fic like this for a while now. Good to see I'm not the only one into the (Love)craft. Great start, but be wary--you got a little long-winded and careless with your punctuation once your sex scene got going. (Also, I have to comment that I love the shoggoth scene, and am deeply appreciative of you. I can never find good shoggoth erotica.)
flameshow
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
excellent style-- there should definitely be a sequel
zvedaveCZ
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
kursk
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
great story! when is the next chapter coming out?
Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Excellent start! Can't wait to see how this story progresses
DarkHeart
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I have to agree with Anonymous, this was an excellent start, and a story many BE writers could use as an example of great writing. Can't wait to see the rest of the story.
Morion
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
banditking
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
This is one of the better storey,s I have read. I like my story,s alittle on the sadistic side. More unbeleiveable the better. This one has both. Size,stretching,and left the story opened for more chapters. Very good.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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