The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Originally a TG, bimbo, BE story from the point of view of the severely transformed individual. TG references removed by RaoulDuke.
Average Scores:

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 5

Declan September 23, 2012 - 5:13 am | Just a fan wanting to say hi. Congratulations on the job, it sonuds fun. I can't wait for your next book to come out.D.B.P.SI wish I had a griffin. If I did and it didn't have a name like Skandar did, then I would call it Kraeda or some thing like that.

The Archivist
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Your attempts to capture the speech of youth are superficial and dated. You do so neither convincingly, nor with any regard to the reader and his/her ability to follow. Hands-down one of the worst stories in this archive.

The Standard
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

A very original story; a very original way to tell it, too. Manages to balance detail with the character's manner of speech.

...forget The Archivist. You can't call something one of the worst in the archive if you haven't read the whole archive (which he probably hasn't [and if he has, that's sad]).

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