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My third story. Jessica has a rather rare alergic reaction to chlorine at her local pool. I won't give too much away but it leads to some serious overstretching of a black swimsuit. Enjoy and please tell me what you think!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.50
- BE: 3.75
- Characters: 3.50
- Technical: 4.00
g
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
should have made the character older, it was weird
tstar
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
too short, not enough effort put into it. not sexy at all.
that rock
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Great story, short, and simple. had lots of description, in the scenes. Loved how she just ignores them.
tsokei
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Well done, nice short and sweet story. The description was really good, and makes this story a great read. The character development and plot could have been stronger, and there was one misspelling that disrupted my reading (mammories -> mammaries). Thanks for posting!
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