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Jennifer grows up into a woman.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.00
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 2.00
- Technical: 1.00
Prototype
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 1
Pretty decent story, but there is one huge flaw, you say years pass, then you say it again for that to be true 2 years would have had to pass each time making the characters 20 after both times kind of starts of slow, then gets really abrupt, I think it'd be better if you spent more time decribing the BE and being more involved with that than you were this time
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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