The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

AMOWAT
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Bibbity Bobbity Boo
A young apprentice find an interesting spell in her masters book. Maybe she shouldn't of read it while drinking?
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 Anonymous
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3 
Rather than add the evil wizard rival at the end, it would have been better to just leave it where the sorceress's will is overpowered and she willingly becomes a tit slave. Don't tack on cliche' endings when you already HAVE a satisfactory ending.
 Fret Pearson
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3 
Very enjoyable.
 buddyu
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5 
I loved the storry I only wish there where more of it, or a siquil.
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