A wish for a fuller chest gone wrong when it is actually granted...
Average Scores:
- Overall: 3.50
- BE: 3.25
- Characters: 3.75
- Technical: 4.50
anon
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
It comes across in your writing that this was a commissioned story. Your heart and dick were not in this. As others have mentioned, I can almost point out the exact spot that you broke your writing session up and came back to the story in a different frame of mind.
OdysseusII
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Agreed with the other commenters. Definitely felt the disconnect, and that it was a bit of a downer at the end. I'm not a fan of kink stories that end up on a downer because I want the people in it to enjoy themselves and I want to enjoy reading that
wilrdcards
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Elara is likeable character at the start, but as times progresses, I felt a disconnect, too passive in narrating the events.
The initial few days were fun to read about, but when time progressed quicker and her breast size jumped up in size accordingly I felt a disconnect. May it have been the clinic or her breasts becoming too large for me which usually isn't that much of an issues. Its only at the end her point of view to her situation switched.
Sobtac
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Pretty intruiging story, with a semi sad ending that takes 'woman is just life support unit for two massive tits' to the logical conclusion. Well written and an exciting journey along the way though!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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