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The Overflowing Bra

Noble Sword
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The Smiths, Part 1 - The Origins
The first story of divine intervention to Steven Smith and his descendants.
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Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5 
Very good. All the names are a little confusing to keep track with, but the setting you built is chef's kiss.
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Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 4 
Where else do you post your work.  The Time Machine is an all time favorite and I always hoped there would be more chapters???
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