The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Trogdor297
Blueberry Wine
Welcome to Green Valley, the only safe village in the Endless Forest, and home of the famous tavern The Blue Drake. Chat with the Djinn tavernkeeper, dine on the delicious food, and if you dare try and best the elven barmaid in a drinking contest...though be warned, shes never lost yet. 
Authors Note: This was my entry to the most recent contest on SwellTales.com.  Theme requirement was Blueberry and Fantasy.  Warning: Ending contains Non-Gore Popping
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 Svin
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3 
Lacks description, gets distinctly uncomfortable at points, the characters feel wooden and twodimensional.
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