Dominick Vasquez has been touched by horrors beyond space and time - and they're awfully sorry to have ruined his day! Now their "apology" has turned his best friend into a busty sex slave, and he's desperate to change her back!
But can he? Should he? She says she's happy! And what's going to happen when his roommate shows up?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.80
- BE: 4.20
- Characters: 5.00
- Technical: 4.40
Nate
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
WOW! Way to start! I can't wait to see you post some more. I loved the take on the premise of the protagonist not knowing howwhy wishes where happening.
MrEcks
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great stuff. Given the intended audience you could've made BE a more central theme in the transformations but other than that enjoyed it a lot.
Bloodhand
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Asmodei
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Very good. Looking forward to your next works.
TROGDOR297
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
Not bad for a first story! Wild way take on a typical wish premise story. Always enjoy when subjects are into the changes. The readability could use some work chop down those paragraphs, be a bit more clear with what's happeningwho's speaking
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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