Im back with another set of incomplete stories. I did end up revisiting two of the entries from the previous volume and rewrote or finished them, so once again if you like one or have ideas for where to take it Ill definitely take it into consideration!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.50
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 5.00
- Technical: 5.00
Ken
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I definitely think you need to continue Girls Trip. I think the best approach would be to have Amelia be unaware of the change like you have done, but have her memory adjust so when shes a double d she thinks shes always been that size and so forth. Might be easier to write that way. She can still continue to think shes small in her own eyes.
DrTopper
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Bigger Is Better You could have just left it just the daytime talk show bit as a short story. Not sure where you could really take this story.
Drug TrialThe only real way forward I can think is kinda rapey and I don't think that's where you wanted to take this story...
Girls TripIt's magic, you don't have to have a reason why she doesn't notice. Also as nice as the airport scene is, I think the story would be more interesting if she got the piercings at the destination, so there can be more intrigue outside of just watching one of the girls grow for however many pages aka other girls get piercings and grow lol
Upgrades I think you could have the both of them feed off each others hedonism and their desires as well as their bodies keep growing and growing to crazier and crazier proportions.
Wigglers I honestly don't think this is any more weird than the alien pregnancy stories you've done. This one might be my favorite of the lot.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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