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The Overflowing Bra

laurelindoriath
The Emancipation of Mallory
Mallory lives a dismal home life with her miserable mother. Her methods of escapism are, however, quite curious...
Average Scores:

AnotherGuy
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 5
Just didn't do anything. The inner monologue nuclear launch codes... is weird and breaks the pacing and tone of stories. Also very little BE and just not enjoyable in the least.
BunnysDead
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
A few minor grammar issues, but great story, interesting characters and believable. Great job! Thank you!!
SomeGuy
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I initially read this story on TitsinTops and loved it and and thrilled that we're finally getting new chapters. The atmosphere is intense and oppressive, but that's going to make Mallory's eventual victory that much sweeter.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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