College freshman Dave tries online dating and is surprised to get matched with Jane, a cute girl so
like him in her interests that he almost can’t believe it. He is even more surprised when he begins to hallucinate a bustier, sluttier version of Jane in his hornier moments. What secret is Jane hiding? Who is this sultry alter-ego ‘Jade’ visiting Dave’s waking wet-dreams?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 5.00
- Characters: 5.00
- Technical: 5.00
Apple
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great story and excellent character writing and descriptions.
Hammer
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Very enjoyable story, great example of show don't tell. Characters were well flushed out and fit in the universe without being well weird. Excited to see your future works.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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