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Samantha recieves amazing weight-gain powers. She uses them on other women, and they gain in all the right places.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 4.50
- Technical: 4.50
FunkForTheFunky
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Honestly, after reading this for probably the third time, the only complaint I can possibly leverage against this would be that I thought the + and then moving to the other person's perspective was a little lazy. Though it was certainly fun to see their reactions at all, I thought those could have been handled a little more smoothly (as an example, Molly and her lover could be heard screaming when Samy was walking away, but the reader doesn't get a pan-away like with the girl smoking in the alley)
Other than that, it should tell you alot that I read this three times. This is hot as hell, man. I really enjoyed going that deep into Samy's mind, as the psychological parts to it only added to the erotic nature of the story. (Particularly impressive was attaching a 'voice' to each of her body parts!)
OlIO
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
over all gives a warping veiwpoint and you can feel the character slipping. other then that the cast of characters is primarly female which is good. it's almost unmatched as far of depth of mind in the main character. like many others of it's kind it ends in a lala land. i whould have like to see her go back to her nine-to-five.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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