After initially regretting her breast implants, Emily has now come to realize that having them isn't the worst thing in the world. But as her feelings soon evolve beyond mere acceptance, she's starting to see them as a part of her, an integral part that's brought her the attention she never knew she wanted. She's starting to think... it might not be enough.
PS: I have put a message to OverflowingBra readers in the beginning of the PDF. Please read, as this is a disclaimer and a reply to comments on part one.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.67
- BE: 3.50
- Characters: 3.83
- Technical: 4.83
OppaiKudasai
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
I've never bothered to give feedback before, suffice to say, I REALLY like this! The fact it's technically good cannot be understated. Consistently correct grammar and spelling go a long way! Really helps me get fully absorbed into the story. As others have said, the feminism traits of Rachel were a bit jarring. There are few things that'll kill the mood like an ideological lecture, even in 3rd person! The BE is really good. I like the slow burn personally, and one thing which is surprisingly uncommon is how it seems so feasiblerealistic. Again, really helps me buy into it! Personal critiques only without giving spoilers, the cc amounts mentioned seem just a little low for the descriptions given, but that may be just me! As said I appreciate the relism, so I'd suggest more modest descriptions, rather than unfeasible numbers. Perhaps mention of bra sizes along the way would help build imagery and be hot, let's be honest! All I'll say is if you do include it, please do a bit of research beforehand, no EE or FFF nonsense, or growing from a 34D to a 48DD etc! All in all, very good so far. With potential to become the next classic. I keenly await following chapters!
OdysseusII
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Overall enjoyed this part, it's definitely a slow burn, but definitely seems like things are picking up, and I'm glad to see the response to the critiques. I understand you don't want to go back and change things, and I can appreciate that, though there were definitely elements of my criticism from the first part that continue through. I found myself skimming through a lot of the part with Rachel until you wrote her chilling out, and I'm hoping that continues through later parts where she isn't as much of a problem
AmanDDa
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I enjoyed part 1 and 2
Do the people who wine about this kind of story realize its fantasy. There is no need to bring some kind of agenda.
Personally I would have liked it if she didn't remember calling the doctor and asking for bigger implants then coming out of surgery with an upgrade.
panda0fd00m
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Love the story and the slow build up. Really interested in seeing what will happen next!
Anon
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 5
I'm enjoying the story so far, but I'm not a fan of the weird tangents on feminism. I get what you're going for, but I think you could be a bit more subtle about it. Asis, we basically take a break from the story to listen to an argument between two strawmen.
THEM
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Most slowburn stories struggle to maintain balance between intensity vs pacing, this series dances like an Olympic skater. I said it before and I'll say it again, more please!
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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