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The Overflowing Bra

Damien Déesse
The Awakening of Emily Brown - Part Two
After initially regretting her breast implants, Emily has now come to realize that having them isn't the worst thing in the world. But as her feelings soon evolve beyond mere acceptance, she's starting to see them as a part of her, an integral part that's brought her the attention she never knew she wanted. She's starting to think... it might not be enough.

PS: I have put a message to OverflowingBra readers in the beginning of the PDF. Please read, as this is a disclaimer and a reply to comments on part one.
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Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4
Overall enjoyed this part, it's definitely a slow burn, but definitely seems like things are picking up, and I'm glad to see the response to the critiques. I understand you don't want to go back and change things, and I can appreciate that, though there were definitely elements of my criticism from the first part that continue through. I found myself skimming through a lot of the part with Rachel until you wrote her chilling out, and I'm hoping that continues through later parts where she isn't as much of a problem 
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I enjoyed part 1 and 2
Do the people who wine about this kind of story realize its fantasy.  There is no need to bring some kind of agenda.

Personally I would have liked it if she didn't remember calling the doctor and asking for bigger implants then coming out of surgery with an upgrade.
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Love the story and the slow build up. Really interested in seeing what will happen next!
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 5
I'm enjoying the story so far, but I'm not a fan of the weird tangents on feminism. I get what you're going for, but I think you could be a bit more subtle about it. Asis, we basically take a break from the story to listen to an argument between two strawmen.
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Most slowburn stories struggle to maintain balance between intensity vs pacing, this series dances like an Olympic skater. I said it before and I'll say it again, more please! 
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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