Anything that Claire writes down becomes true.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.80
- BE: 2.80
- Characters: 2.60
- Technical: 3.40
Cadfael
Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 3
Reviewing this as someone who came in looking for a story about boobs getting bigger.
This really didn't do much for me. Didn't really feel like it had a focus on having big breasts, or breasts getting bigger, so much as being an exotic mind control story that keeps reassuring me that the breasts are big, and getting even bigger.
The writing style wasn't bad. It was legible, I understood what was going on, and all that, but this is not a character focused story. This story is about the erotica and isn't really I terested in the characters beyond getting them together and letting someone control their lives and bodies.
I ended up turning away and reading something else around the middle of it. The dialogue, characters, and transformations ranged from mildly uninteresting to kind of a little offputting. In particular, around where I stopped, the story featured semisapient, prehensile breasts and vagina as a focus. It doesn't mention that anywhere in the description, and theres no little teaser or warning about that being a focus. I guess it's just a fun little surprise if you like that, so if you're looking for a story about that but we're on the fence, uh, there you go, enjoy. But it really wasn't my thing.
I like stories that focus around size, heft, and the inconveniences of having unrealistically big body parts, and this story was interested in something else. It. Didn't grab me, but I can see this being someone's jam, I guess.
a spooky ghost
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
this had a great variety of transformations. always love your work. and for what it's worth i had no trouble opening the file.
meh
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
To me this is very average master PC story. I kind of dont find the lesbian girl sexy with her commands, there is no character change or development. No deeper description e.g. how the tall girl feels about sporting such a huge pair compared to others... story just feels meh
RedGhost
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5
The file works if you change it from .pdf.zip to being just .zip and then open it with WinZip or another file decompression application. I thought the story was okay with multiple silly fantasy twists in it that the main character had fun with before it all ended, though the ending seemed like a bit of a cop out. Two of the characters have a little bit of backstory but the third is just, well, there. Descriptions are fine with a bit of purple prose but it doesn't detract from the story. Worth reading.
Ihhb
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
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