A pilot gets some big and milky changes after a strange encounter on a standard flight.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.50
- BE: 3.00
- Characters: 2.50
- Technical: 1.50
takaine
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
Just want to tell you both good luck. We're all counting on you.
Rabbit
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 1
The parts about the protagonist as a child are incredibly uncomfortable to read. Reading about the penis of a prepubescent child and a teenager is a strange choice and the fact that it culminates in him being molested by an adult is awful. What's worse is that this entire section of the plot of essentially useless. None of it comes back at all to have any tangible purpose. This is actually a recurring problem within the story. Ideas are brought up and then dropped. Lesbian ex wife? Dropped. Penis pride? Dropped. Bisexuality? Dropped. I honestly thought I'd screwed up with opening the file when the story ended with the main character's first female orgasm but when I used a different application it came out the same way.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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