Celeste discovers her boyfriend has a thing for unusually large breasts. Her determination to become the woman of his dreams leads her to the Expanding Horizons Clinic.
Note: The 'preg' tag here is representative of just straight Belly Expansion.
Enjoy and as always feedback is appreciated!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.60
- BE: 5.00
- Characters: 4.80
- Technical: 4.40
Toymaker
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
I really liked the greediness and drive to be the biggest once each woman saw what was possible, and for me personally the she consumed mass quantities of and her breasts got huge is always a winner.
Oddly enough, I felt like Jolene wasn't described that well, mainly the shape of her breasts when they weren't lying on the table, but I might need to reread it. I would have loved to see Celeste walkget trucked back to the fair and show Jolene what she'd been driven to do, or have her boyfriend lose his mind over her, but the ending made sense as it was this story wasn't going to try to get into the logistics of actually having 7foot breasts, just the journey of acquiring them. D
Attribute theft might be something to explore, if you're looking for inspiration.
Belover76
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
This is one of the best stories I've read in a long time. It aroused me in away I hadn't been aroused in nearly a decade. You have a great writing style and a superb understanding of where a story should be headed. You have some minor grammatical errors, but they pale in comparison to the incredible story writing. I've never felt compelled to leave feedback on this site before this story changed that. Everything, from the universal boobie greed experienced by the characters and the constant competitive spirit, to the build up to the climax, is artistically crafted. I especially love the implication that Celeste took extra pills without actually stating it until she's already undergoing treatment. You clearly know what you're doing and trust your audience to piece things together, which is a lot to ask in this day of the MCU and TikTok tbh. Keep up the good work, and I've got plenty of ideas if you ever need some inspiration I've got one about growthinducing nipple piercings that's been rolling around in my head for a while but honestly, I think you could pull that off better if you want it.
OdysseusII
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
I liked it a lot. But it felt like it got cut off a bit at the end. There definitely should have been a scene with her actually getting to fulfill all the fantasies
ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Celeste was a lot of fun, but the loving wifegirlfriend trope is difficult to dislike given the context. I particularly enjoyed this story of yours because the fantasy of a woman getting enormous boobs and receiving orgasmic spasms will likely never get old to me.
cman
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
You do a great job of capturing the greed and determinism that's such a fun aspect in BE stories like this! Really nice writing.
Don't be afraid to write the sex scenes. You did it well in The Secretary! It would be nice to see that payoff for Celeste after all the trouble she went through
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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