Lacey has a dream about her boobs growing, only it doesn't just happen in her dream.
This is my first story.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.00
- BE: 4.20
- Characters: 3.80
- Technical: 4.00
BunnysDead
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 2
Very entertaining short story. The BE description and quantity for being such a short story were superb great job Delphinus! There were some grammar issues that, for me, detracted from the story. Perhaps in the future run this by a proofreader or grammar check software.
Keep up the great work!
Professional F
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Really nice quick story.
And I personally like that the size remains grounded in the realm of the realistic but upper end of unlikely.
Just as constructive criticism the ending maybe was a bit flat.
XXX
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
A solid start, i like it. the story tag should be big, not huge, but thats ok. i would like see more from you, maybe a second part of this story, where she get huge.
ktc
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
My perception of what constitutes big breasts at this point is so perverted now that the size the gal ended up at felt very small. For what it is, it's fine. I'd say there was clear grammatical and structural critique but I'm no writer myself and it's not like the story's point is illegible. For a first short, it's perfectly fine and its exciting to get a new writer for the community .
BEluvr
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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