Evelyn has never lacked for lovers, but she's never been able to achieve orgasm before. Magic can help her, but can she make use of an easy fix without becoming reliant on it?
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.67
- BE: 2.67
- Characters: 2.67
- Technical: 4.00
LOABW
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Mimicking aylamb adiposerex is prolific, interesting, and grammatically proficient. But their stories are great character building... and honestly not really great at the actual flufffetish aspect they seem to be writing towards.
Having tried to read their work for the last couple years, it always hits a pattern Great character building that draws me in, and then some of the most flat expansionfocused qualities that seem to be written almost as if they were grown in a sterile lab by somebody looking on from ten feet away.
aylamb
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
Spoilers within Unfortunately I found this one more lacking than I'd hoped. While it might not technically apply because it's just boobs, a GTS tag would be appropriate from a storytelling perspective. Similarly this fell into a lot of the same problems I feel can come from GTS escalation of growth, including a loss of characterization and description. The lead ceases to become a character about halfway snd instead becomes a vessel for describing the plot actions, and the growth becomes a lot less about describing shape and form and sensation and more tell than show.
This is extra unfortunate because I feel the author is very good at hitting these points wellI was hooked in very quickly by the story of an offbeat lead and her desire for sensation that also happened to involve expansion and a series of sexual conquests. That dropping off hard at the end in favor of She then did X, which caused Y and Z, and then she became gigantic and conquered the world. was made all the more disappointing by the strong beginning, especially when the escalation is the point of the story. It just became emptier repetition.
I hope to see more from the author, there's skill there, and I think I'd appreciate a different kind of plot from them.
Some Guy
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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