The Overflowing Bra

Why does this exist?

Ignore the sad loser going around rating things bad and changing his name. He's just mad mommy got him seven daddies and counting 

Suspect a child wrote this. It should be removed.

It's not really good, but somehow enjoyable. I really want to know how you continue this story.

In lieu of comment, here is my favorite section with no alterations

She look stunning. Like a freshly peeled egg is her skin, her boobs are gigantic, her belly a monstrosity. All her clothes are sown by herrself, at home on her sowing mashone. Her lipstick is of bright pink color and almost blinding to the observer. She is ready for her date with Mr. Mysterious.

I laughed really hard. The commenter who recommended you finish high school was on the mark. This seems like something a 12 year old just starting puberty would write. Maybe wait till youre at least 18 to post erotica. By all means keep writing for yourself, you cant improve without practice, but maybe keep your practicing private. 

Not good at all

Borderline incomprehensible, as if the writer has never actually read prose fiction before, only heard it described to them from afar. Assuming they aren't just a troll, any author that can't already tell what's wrong with this story needs more help than anyone here can provide. My advice would be to finish high school, read more published fiction erotic or not, and develop a sense of what cogent prose looks like so they can edit their work into even a rough approximation of it. 

In an ocean of dogshit stories you've somehow submitted shit from a whale and called it gold.
 
Dont even waste your time reading this as a home or out of curiosity. 

if you're an erotica author with concerns about your technique, descriptions or dialogue skills please read this and understand what the rest of us are having to wade thru to find quality work

This is horrible but involuntarily entertaining still. The hotnessmeter didn't exactly rise in my case, but when it just randomly said You also orgasm, I lost it.

absolutely incredible. the greatest thing ive ever read. incredibly erotic

Stop calling it shit, make actual criticism that helps

Feels more like a shitpost than the other one. Not sure if that's your intention. Still terrible. I actually think the drawings are great for a 7 year old. Since that's about the level of writing ability you've shown here.

Well... I'm able to read what you wrote, but you really need to spend a lot more time writing a story Like. The plot is more lika a plothole and any description of characters except the obvious BE part is missing. Please, never draw anything into your writings again, it's just awful.

If you're willing to spend some time writing a story around this base idea, I think you can create a good short story.

Shitpost of the worst kind.

Are we being trolled? Is that what this is supposed to be?