Extreme breast expansion story I did awhile back.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.17
- BE: 2.17
- Characters: 2.17
- Technical: 2.00
yyz
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
this writer is on DA under the same name and all of their stories are exactly as poorly written as this one. and the attitude shown here is about how they act on DA, too. fun stuff!
anotherdude
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
dumb kid can't take feedback on a story
Rev45
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
The author decided to flame someone giving legitimately helpful feedback. Pass.
Han216
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3
The one that left the previous comment is the real writer. The fact this is a thing means I'm never posting here again.
Han216
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Inflator
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 1
It seems like english isn't your first language, good effort for what you tried to do but try to find someone to help proof things and get a better flowing draft. Was very jarring on some of the sentences, and just didn't flow well.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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