A story of a girl with pumpkin allergies and what happens when she has to work at a pumpkin patch! Spoiler alert: her own pumpkins do some growing
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 5.00
- Characters: 5.00
- Technical: 5.00
Luvtail
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
One thing makes this story stand out to me on this site, and that's that it's the only one I've seen to make such effective use of onomatopoeia sound effects! It's a little bit overused perhaps, bordering on being excessive definitely so during the sex scene, but it's better to see that than the zero amount of onomatopoeia that 90 of stories here usually contain! Expansion writers could take a few notes here Sound effects can really spice up a growth scene!
The growth was all fantastic, with the climax an absolutely stellar bit of BE with all of my favourite tropes, from the onomatopoeia to the increasingly allcaps dialogue to the imminent threat of popping and being brought juuust to the edge of bursting. It ticked basically every box for me!
My only criticism would be to not put the artwork of the key expansion scene and kudos to you of course for commissioning artwork to go with your story, always a super welcome sight, I wish more people would do this! at the start of the story, as it's definitely a spoiler! Put it just after the moment in the story that the scene it contains actually happens, that way it's not a spoiler but a fun surprise for the reader! and yes you did do this too, and it was the perfect spot for it, it just didn't need to be at the start of the doc too!
Thanks for an amazing read!
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