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Juniper has a stepbrother that is quite a jerk, so she decided to use a protective spell that will take away from him what he value the most. Unfortunately, she didn't expect the spell to work or that her stepbrother was so prideful
(Warning. This story contains a female developing a dick)
Another story commissioned by Burningfield.
My native language isn't english, so apologies for the grammar and spelling errors present in the story
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 4.67
- Characters: 4.67
- Technical: 4.00
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Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Pretty good! I've read worse from native English speakers. Only real suggestion I have is more consistent characterization might help. Juniper's personality seemed all over the place at times for no real reason. Other than that it was good stuff.
Svin
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 3
Excellent. Your English needs a bit of work, but a good story nonetheless.
Thorra
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Loved everything about the story the teasing 1010 loved when she Said do i really look like a monster When looking this hot
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