Josh gets tired of the other cheerleaders' endless cockteasing an decides to do something about it.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 5.00
- BE: 4.50
- Characters: 4.50
- Technical: 5.00
Alyzero
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Once again, your writing style and descriptions really shine. This might get fixed in chapter 4, but I felt that the 2nd half of this chapter felt a little unfocused since you kept describing the girls being changed as a group, instead of focusing on one person, like Samantha. Really looking forward to the next part!
MrEcks
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great as ever. Can't wait for part 4!
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