Clay tries his new body-shaping powers on Tani for the first time. Which will be stronger, his magic or her curse?
Thanks for the response so far! As long as the positive ratings keep coming, the uploads will continue.
Average Scores:
- Overall: 4.71
- BE: 4.43
- Characters: 4.71
- Technical: 4.86
TheSecondSon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Great Work! I'd still love to see more breast mage content, although I know that's coming down the pipeline, but I thought these two chapters started to branch into character development more and I'm starting to get invested. You've built a nice setting, and I'm excited to see how these characters grow. Literally and figuratively LMAO
d3nia1
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
The description of the transformation was absolutely amazing. You've evoked sympathy for both characters. I'm hooked and want to know what happens to each of them.
Tarquin
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Extraordinarily good writing, but downgrade on the BE Tani strengthening her muscles so she can get around without backache is a downer, eliminating the hot, exciting realism of the Callanthan noblewomen being so topheavy they can't walk. Elira already having to be carried around, and looking forward to getting so breastheavy she can't stand up without help. That's big! Story needs to get back to that maybe if Tani accepts the burden of being grossly overdeveloped, her new charms won't go away! But very good story, many thanks.
deuxanges
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Enjoying how the story is unfolding. Without giving any spoilers, I feel sorry for Tani and am now wondering about her background.
Revealer
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4
Preffered the third chapter a bit more, as it was more about the aftermath, clothes not fitting, strained, the transformation strong but not debilitating.
Please keep up the good work and keep the multiprotagonist format, but some larger chapters!
Firebeard
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5
Bloodhand
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5
Excellent. I cannot wait for more
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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