A high school boy needs to sneak into the girls locker room while the girls are in the pool... to get his phone back, not for anything else. Little does he know he's being set up by his crush, for an intense transformation! This is my first story, with more (hopefully) to come!
Average Scores:
- Overall: 2.50
- BE: 2.00
- Characters: 2.25
- Technical: 3.25
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Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 4
Only about 45 seconds long and has ZERO BE in it past And then tits grew to X size.
GeoffK
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 4
This is Ok, but it's more a transgender story than a BE story. His boobs get bigger, since he's a girl now, but it's not really the focus of the story. It's fairly well written, but a little rushed, and he seems to accept the radical transformation unrealistically calmly and easily.
As for the file, I could open it with WordPad, but MS Word 2016 wouldn't open it. I recommend using rtf format, which is more widely readable and checking with Word,
iciw
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1
says the file is broke for me
Russian Judgennteresting for a first story
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4
Pretty interesting for a first story. Should go into fun places among the teens in the school and teachers?. However...why don't writers here run their stories through a spell checker, and get a trusted friend to check the grammar before submitting? In the next chapter, the boyturnedgirl ought to be more interested in how her body feels and reacts when she has sex with boys, girls and oothers.
Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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